Narrative Asttle Writing

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING
The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs.

Walt to write a creative story!

24.11.2021

Once upon a time there was a guy called Lee he went for an unexpected Adventure then a myistereyous voice apeard saying help me help me he turned and said whos there know one was there. he heard it again it was a girl that was in her head her name was Sera. Sera told him every thing she knew Lee was super comfuesd he had never heard anything called a Zero Point and the Loop but he knew how he would tell his his friend but he didint want to anoy him and he wouldint beleave him so he went to Sera without him. And suddenly he saw the bunker that sera told him to go to. he stoped thought and dived into the bunker that Sera told him to go into. One door was open that Sera left open so Sera was not lying he slowly went down and saw the Zero Point he went down a litle more and there was a remote on the ground but it was broken Sera said it is the only thing that could bring her back but the remote was broken. But Lee had a soultion if he could go to his normal home he could get peacseis and fix it so he ran as fast as he could until he got home he was home he was looking for his remote by the tv and got the other remote that could save sera and put the peacsis in. He got to the bunker and saved her and they became friends forever.

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Leeite a creative narrative

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My Lockdown Bubble

Our Legends Assembly

We are learning to use descriptive language in our writing.

First Draft - Mahuika Show

We are writing about our experience at the Mahuika Show.

Once apon a time there were two little girls one was named Sisy and the other was Kahu Kahu was always was angry with Sisy because Sisy was very lazy but Kahu was a bosy bot kahu was Seting up camp until she saw a magic Kete she opened it her Nana froze and a flaming finger nail jumped out of the Kete he was the last flaming finger nail from Mahuika and nana froze so they took the flaming finger nail and tried to give him back. but Pokeko took him and put him on his back and took to the swamp Pokeko had a flaming beak from Mahuikas curse so Pokeko took the flaming finger nail to Mahuika when they go there Mahuika said who dears to enter my house the last time someone then she stoped and looked and she saw the flaming finger nail. so Mahuika fixed Pokekos beak and he was happy and Mahuika unfroze Nana.

Next steps

• Re read each sentence - does it make sense?
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your spelling errors

      

                                                                               

                                                                                      

Final Draft - Descriptive Writing - My Mum

Mum looks like a hard working lady, she has pure black hair, she is a medium size lady, she has brown sparkling eyes, she has long lovely hair. My mum’s favourite colour is purple.

Mum likes to meet new people and she likes to try out new things.She would never do a dare but she would always have at least four coffees. We love to go down the driveway and back and we like to bake delicious cakes.

On Friday we always get take we always only pick three shops we always pick the same three shops. She would always surprise me with something amazing like the giant Lego box. We sometimes go cleaning together but it’s rare. She helps me with my homework she likes to watch the 7 seeds and hospital shows. She support me in my soccer games mum makes me feel amazing. Mum is the best mum ever because she loves and cares not just our own family every other family's out there. I love my mum.  LT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

The Great Reading Adventure

We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'. 

lass assembly, eat Reading Adventure'.

I had butterflies in my stomach. It was show time! I got up on stage. I felt nervous but I did it anyway. I had to try. I got the microphone and said my line was i prefer human beans tonight. I'm off to Chilli to swabble up a few chilly human beans and I was scared. That I might make a mistake. But I didn't. I was proud of myself that I did it. But I was happy in my head. I sat down in my spot till the music settled down. Then the other marvellous people were on the soft middle of the stage then here comes the sun music came on it was the maui and the sun group maui looked amazing but so did I then maui pulled the ropes Tight the sun said let me go i'll go more slowly with great expression it was fabulous!!!

Tsunami Evacuation

We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience. 

On Friday when had free writing Friday there was an alarm and the teacher said let's go on an adventure. I was worried I got my bag and put my hat on my head and went in line.  For some reason we went up a hill and people kept talking about it. That's how I knew what was going on. There was a tsunami then I felt nervous. I saw mum park her car but I still had to go up. I waited for the first stop to eat. I was so hungry I was surprised how mum got over the fence. Some people were crying but then they almost made me sad so I felt sad and worried along with being nervous. I went to the second stop. It was way higher then I felt very safe. Then mum made it after 10 minutes she made it up to us I gave her a big hug but I did have a little hissy fit, just a tiny one!

Tractor Trek

 On Friday the tractor trek came to talk to us and there were tractors outside and one army truck. I went in the tractors and it was epic. I felt great.  

In the whare a lady called Cat talked to us about important things called feelings. Cat had a big feeling that no one loved her or wanted to be her friend but actually they did love her and wanted to be her friend so that feeling became smaller and smaller.  

In the assembly about feelings Tame got a skeleton costume and Millan had hilarious glassas and Charlie had an amazing mask. They were all funny. I was cracking up laughing. It was the best part!

All About Me Poem

I am learning to add details to my writing.  add details to my 

i wrote a poem about myself and whanau